New advertisement for my business, opinions welcome!

[codydewey]

Hello all!

I've created a new advertisement for my Custom PC business with Photoshop. I am in no way a PS pro, nor a big league ad executive, and that's why I'm here. As with any business you want your advertisement to look good and appeal to your customer base. I would like any comments, critique or suggestions you can offer me.
Please take the time to look and reply.

Here is a version I use for my local community: BEFORE YOU VOTE- Check further down the page for more current revisions!
*Click to make BIG!

[FoodStampz]

TBH, I think it's a bit too "busy". Too much going on in that, and the icons on the bottom are smashed together and looks rather generic. No offense.

[codydewey]

TBH, I think it's a bit too "busy". Too much going on in that, and the icons on the bottom are smashed together and looks rather generic. No offense.

Foodstampz my man, break the beat down!

That is precisely the kind of advice I am looking for friend!
Thank you!

[codydewey]

I like the over all look of it.
I think there are a bit to many two guys in white up about you all though. One is enough.
I would like to see better pics of the rigs with it. Mostly the endgamer as it just looks like an empty case. Maybe a good pic of a finished one or at least a mock up so that you can see components in it.
I agree about the logos at the bottom as well. Maybe if you arranged them different so they have better flow across the bottom would help.

Thank you Josey.
Just to clarify, do you feel like two white cases is overkill, or are you saying there is too much white writing? I think you are saying the "Two guys statement on the left is a bit heavy, right?
I will do something to make that Corsair 800D at the bottom look equipped with some gear. In regards to the flow you and Stampz have mentioned, please clarify a bit for me. (I have been staring at this thing all day dwindling my creative spark.)

Thank you for the reply and suggestions, look forward to anything further you might share.
Cheers!

[codydewey]

I have made a few revisions to the wording regarding "two guys" on the left, Decided on featuring a case without a transparent window for the "ENDGAMER", and rearranged the logos at the bottom.

For better or worse, plz let me know!

[codydewey]

endgame
founded by two guys from eugene, origon.
we strive to build the most powerful computers for you to enjoy.
our systems are hand built and tuned for maximum performance.

each endgame system is....

Thank you for all your suggestions thus far!
Here is another revision, please let me know if I have captured the changes you have suggested!
Thanks again!
-Cody
(Click to enlarge)

[Gordo]

Aspect ratio should reflect the more common screen format - way you have it leaves a lot of unused side screen area and/or requires scrolling.
I don't know about other's view on it, but the first seems sloppy and the latter a nuisance and, in some instances, it may be missed that there was more to be seen by scrolling.

Best wishes for the business, BTW.

[codydewey]

Aspect ratio should reflect the more common screen format - way you have it leaves a lot of unused side screen area and/or requires scrolling.
I don't know about other's view on it, but the first seems sloppy and the latter a nuisance and, in some instances, it may be missed that there was more to be seen by scrolling.

Best wishes for the business, BTW.

Cheers!
Thank you for the input Gordo!
I was thinking it was a bit large myself. I have reduced the width/height a good deal. Please tell me what you think of this size;

[icemanchilled]

I would give the free Razer mouse and keyboard graphic a more prominent placing, people love to think they got something for free. Then remove the two lines from the descriptions that say about the Razer KB/Mouse, since that's a lot of words crammed in there and with the free KB/Mouse graphic being more noticeable, they aren't needed. Then i'd centre the Razer graphic in the middle area and shift the monitor/speakers graphic to the bottom centre in the space freed up by removing the lines in the descriptions. Finally i'd flip the right case to a mirror image, so the page looks more symmetrical and move the prices of the two top systems so they are centred in their space and not cramped to one side.

[codydewey]

I would give the free Razer mouse and keyboard graphic a more prominent placing, people love to think they got something for free. Then remove the two lines from the descriptions that say about the Razer KB/Mouse, since that's a lot of words crammed in there and with the free KB/Mouse graphic being more noticeable, they aren't needed. Then i'd centre the Razer graphic in the middle area and shift the monitor/speakers graphic to the bottom centre in the space freed up by removing the lines in the descriptions. Finally i'd flip the right case to a mirror image, so the page looks more symmetrical and move the prices of the two top systems so they are centred in their space and not cramped to one side.

Will have to find a pic of the 600t facing to the left, as mirror imaging is going to cause the window of the case to appear on the right side.

I will realign the areas you mentioned in the AM, as Im a bit tired this evening. Check back in 10-12 hrs for further updates. Thank you for the insight Ice, you've offered some excellent advice!